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Melinda Shroeder

English 101

11/21/16

Persuasive Essay Outline 1 of 2
Who Contributes More to Society? Teachers, or Doctors?

    Have you ever had stitches? Been given a prescription for antibiotics? A major surgery? Even just a routine check-up? Maybe even a sports physical? The point is, just about everyone has been to a doctor at some point. Without them, how would we know if we’re healthy or if there’s something wrong? Who would fix us when we’re broken? Doctors take care of the general public and do a great service to the world. Keeping us alive.

     But how do we get our doctors? Who trains them, shows them the way so that they don’t kill all their patients? Without teachers, would we even have doctors? Where would anyone be if no one showed us what we needed to do? In school, we rely on our teachers to show us how to make it in life, give us what we need to make good choices in the real world. Without teachers, how would we learn anything?

    Who truly contributes more to society? Does one or the other really do more for the world? Think about this; doctors save people’s lives. They find new ways every day to combat the injuries and diseases we sustain more often than anyone would like. But who gives them the knowledge to do these things?

  From an early age, we are sent to school. Our teachers show us everything we know from how to read and write to learning how to become what we want for our lives. “Each profession occupies a specific niche in society — doctors heal, engineers design and bankers handle our money. Teaching, however, stands out as a subsumptive entity.” (Indian Express, New Delhi) Without teachers, we would have nothing else. Even after high school, when we choose a life career, it is teachers that show us how to do that.

    That’s not to say that doctors aren’t a huge part of our society, because they are. We rely on doctors to help us when we’re sick, or to fix us when we’re broken. Without them many of us would die from things that we don’t think twice about because we know that we can get help.

    Over all, the point is, neither profession is more important than the other. Each one is important in a different way. Sometimes we may not notice that they’re there, but we would notice if they weren’t. We rely on both for different reasons and it would be unfair to say that one is more important than the other.

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Andrea Donoghue

Melinda Shroeder

English 101

11/21/16

Persuasive Essay Outline 2 of 2

Should There be Stricter Rules About How Coaches Treat Their Players?

    When it comes to sports, not everyone is naturally gifted. Some people have to work harder to get better at basketball or volleyball or track. Some people don’t try, don’t care. Others just don’t seem to have what it takes. But is that really the case, or do these people just need a little extra coaching? Where does the line between readying the varsity for state, and being unfair to the other players become blurry?

    Should coaches be allowed to decide who is worth coaching and who is not? In a large school, you have tryouts, but at a small school, anyone can play. You have the Varsity and sometimes the JV. When there is no JV, there’s those few players “second string” sometimes called that play at the end of games that go well. In a league game, only varsity is supposed to play. But does that mean that they are the only ones who should be coached?

  The question here would be; at what point does having certain kids on the sidelines during practice become okay? Anyone who has been on a sports team that does not have a JV knows that not every player gets to play in every game. Bu that just comes with being on a team. You need to work your way up and contribute what you can to your team. But how can a coach build a strong team, if he/she only coaches a select few? “...When I thought I did something right he thought it was wrong, and when I tried to work hard and gain his approval it was never good enough…” (anonymous 16 year old football player) this is an example of coaches being unfair on their players. There should be standards that coaches are held to. He/she should be trying to help every player willing to learn.

    This is not to say that there should be ‘one way or the highway’, there should be room for creativity, and technique. No one should be benched because the coach doesn’t want to take the time to teach, or is just plain bullying one or more players.  

    When it comes down to it, I strongly believe that every athlete should be given an equal chance to excel if they have the will and the patience to learn. Coaches should be held to higher standards as far as who ‘deserves’ coaching. Everyone should be given a fair chance.

Andrea Donoghue

11/9/16

Melinda Shroeder

English 101

Compare and Contrast

The purpose of my paper is to show that Biology and Chemistry are intertwined and you can’t have one without the other. I chose to do this subject because I enjoy science. It is my favorite subject in school and I feel like I can learn more by researching this topic.
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Andrea Donoghue

10/20/16

Melinda Shroeder

English 101

Summaries

 In the short story Fish Cheeks, the author, Amy Tan, seems to be trying to get across a lesson learned by the girl in the story. She is so embarrassed by her family's traditions contrasting to those of the American boy whom she has a crush on. In the end the girl talks about how her mother told her that she must be proud to be different. She says how many years later she truly realized and appreciated the lesson. And realized her mother cooked all her favorite foods. The purpose of the story is to make people realize it’s okay to be different. You don’t need to be the same as everyone else. Be yourself.

  Superman and Me is the story of a Native American boy growing up on a reservation. He goes deep into the stereotypes of Native Americans, and how he overcame them. He tells about his love of books and how that is because of his father. Alexie talks about how he learned to read from a Superman comic book. I think that the purpose of this story is to show that it is possible to overcome diversity and stereotypes that you may think hold you down.

Choice of Analysis

  I choose to analyse Superman and Me. This is because I feel that this story is deeper, and has more meaning to it. Fish Cheeks is a great story, and I love the lesson behind it, but I feel that I can relate better to Alexie’s love for reading and overcoming stereotypes. I also love the way he saw the world in paragraphs. I don’t know how everyone else sees the world, but that seems different and unique to me. Lastly, in paragraph eight, he talks about being surprised how his life turned out, how he had  not wanted to be a writer, but to be a pediatrician.  I see that as you can’t necessarily predict how things will turn out, you can have an idea, but then change your mind, something can happen, or life
changes.

Citations

Alexie, Sherman. "Superman and Me." 2014. The Bedford Reader. 12th ed. N.p.: n.p., n.d. N. pag. Print

Tan, Amy. "Fish Cheeks." The Bedford Reader. 12th ed. N.p.: n.p., n.d. N. pag. Print.
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Andrea Donoghue

10/7/16

Melinda Schroeder

English 101

Favorite Place Free Write

What makes a place great? Is it the place itself? Or something else? The people? The sights? What is there that makes it worth going to? For me it’s usually the people associated with the place. Without the people, what is there that could make somewhere so special? There’s gotta be something in the place that makes it worth going to. A place without people to make it special is just empty. Why would you go to an empty place?

   One of my favorite places, I go to after school. Not every day, but often enough. It gives me something to look forward to after brain-frying math. I go twice a week, every three days if you include the weekend. If I could go every day, I would. But it’s still the best part of the week.

  Being there is often the highlight of my week, since not much goes on around here. There’s often more than just one person to hang out with, and both people make the place worth going to. Without the people there, this place would not be as special.  

  I could go anywhere with anyone, and have a great time. If you had told me four years ago that this is somewhere I would be looking forward to going every week, I would have said you were crazy. It’s not something I would have expected for myself, but now I wouldn’t change a thing.

  I can get a lot done in a half hour, but I have to be careful not to do something stupid like stapling my finger (learned that the hard way). The things I do there might not seem like much fun, making posters to hang on the walls, or testing experiments, but I actually like it. So much better than math.

  Posters like Dory with “Just keep swimming” or a funny monster that kind of looks like Spongebob. There are serious ones too, like a dihybrid cross. But personally, I like the funny ones. The only thing, is that when I hang them up, I have to be careful not  to fall off a stool. I haven’t made that mistake (yet).

  A couple times before school started, I got to spend the whole day there. Every time I’m there, there’s something to do. There’s never a dull moment (usually). The best part is that there’s no math! Just kidding, even though that’s great, the best part is that I’m with people I truly enjoy spending time with. It’s time I wouldn’t give up for the world.

 Summary

"Why We Lie" is a short essay about experiments done to figure out why people lie and cheat the way we do. They mostly experimented with college students who did not know that they were being tested. They had the students solve matrices for money. In the initial experiment they had a control group that solved as many as they could in five minutes and then told how many they solved, while the other group did the same, but shredded their papers when they were done, so no one would know if they lied about how many they completed (Dan Ariely, par. 6).

  The results showed that those who did not shred their papers solved about four of them, while the ones who did shred their paper solved about six or seven. It showed that when given the option, people will cheat just a little. There were very few who claimed to have solved all twenty matrices.

  After the initial experiment, they changed variables, like the amount of money per matrix, They even did a group that got tokens for every matrix, but the tokens were exchanged for cash. They proceeded to do an experiment by sending car insurance papers to people, some where you sign on the top, somewhere you sign on the bottom.

  "Locks are on doors only to keep honest people honest". Locks on doors might not be able to keep the completely dishonest thieves out but, the author stated that it's the "nice old lady who couldn't carry off your flat screen TV if she wanted to" but might be tempted to "borrow  a cup of sugar without asking" if the door is unlocked, are the people who are kept out.

Paragraph 10

  Paragraph ten says that since most people cheat, even if not by much, the next thing to find out is what makes people cheat more or less.

Citations

  

Ariely, Dan. "Why We Lie." The Bedford Reader 12th (2014): 440-46. Print.

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